There is a roar that builds deep in my chest
deafening
I cannot hear, what did you just say?
Your leaving just not today
I'm running but its not to get away
Every time I forget about your needs
The roar becomes claws, making it impossible to breathe
pain
functioning is questionable now
So with tampered settings is it fair
that I seek what I cannot bear
without is a like a withdrawal of air
breathless
Selfish is how I act
I can only apologize for what I lack
a labyrinth without an end
lost
you're my corner stone
forgive me for taking you
I quite like this poem, it's honest and sincere and the emotion in it is well placed. It's very relatable, and your language, while blunt, adds more than is seen at first.
ReplyDeleteA suggestion would be to change the title from Rawr to Roar, as roar just seems more serious and intense while rawr seems light-hearted to me.
Another would be to maybe add a please, for instance
"you're my corner stone
please forgive me for taking you"
Most excellent!
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